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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

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The creation of social media certainly had a drastic effect which could not be ignored,
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, it is important to acknowledge that not utilizing apps of that nature might not bring diminishing consequences to people's professional
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 level of experience and a respectable degree in their field.
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, qualifications are more
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 the nature of human beings, which is forming social groups.
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, success requires abilities to socially interact in a manner that would bring positive outcomes,
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, despite social media offering alluring opportunities,
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 side of some individuals that might result in significant damage to the author's mental health.
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 surge in
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 the internet.
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, social media indeed offers great
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, I believe the outcomes might not be as those that were intended and
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, the benefits are not
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, causing careers to fall. Ultimately, from my perspective, an employee's success in their field stems from one's qualifications,
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While the essay tackles the topic, it does not directly address the specific questions posed about the consequences and benefits of expressing complaints on social media. Ensure to stick closely to the prompt.
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Introduce more specific examples to support your points. This will help to illustrate your ideas better and demonstrate your understanding.
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Improve the clarity and depth of your ideas. Develop each point more comprehensively, ensuring that each one logically follows from the previous one and relates back to the main topic.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single main point. Ensure that these points flow logically to maintain coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each main point is sufficiently supported with relevant details and examples. This will enhance your arguments and make them more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps structure your essay.
task achievement
Good attempt at discussing multiple points and perspectives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accountability
  • Public venting
  • Reputation management
  • Social media platform
  • Complaining culture
  • Community solidarity
  • Conflict resolution
  • Entitlement
  • Direct communication
  • Customer service
  • Exposure
  • Misinformation
  • Amplification
  • Systemic issues
  • Constructive feedback
  • Online atmosphere
  • Negative content
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