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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
#amount #uk #investments #energy
The given bar chart illustrates the rate of
investment
on
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 different types of clean
energy
, like solar,
wind
,
energy
 smart technologies and 'other'
energy
 in
uk
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UK
 within a period of 8
years
, commencing from 2008.
Overall
, the highest rate of
investment
 can be observed for
wind
 in 2015
while
 the opposite can be seen for
energy
 smart technologies in 2008. solar and
wind
energy
 were significantly greater than that of other categories.
According to
 the
digram
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diagram
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, at the beginning of the period, the
investment
 for
wind
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the wind
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 was around 2bn in 2008,
this
 figure increased moderately within 2
years
 to get to over 5bn.
this
 number keeps fluctuating over the period to
finsh
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finish
 over 10bn. solar
energy
 had the same amount of
investment
 in four different
years
. the majority of people interested in
spend
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 money
for
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on
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wind
energy
 over the
years
while
 the minority can be considered for
energy
 smart technologies. the more noticeable feature is that people do not have
intersted
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interest
 in
investment
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investing
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for
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in
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 solar
energy
 in 2008 and 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words investment, energy, wind, years with synonyms.
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