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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
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The given bar chart illustrates the rate of
investment
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on
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in
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 different types of clean
energy
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, like solar,
wind
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,
energy
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 smart technologies and 'other'
energy
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 in
uk
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UK
 within a period of 8
years
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, commencing from 2008.
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, the highest rate of
investment
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 can be observed for
wind
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 in 2015
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 the opposite can be seen for
energy
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 smart technologies in 2008. solar and
wind
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energy
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 were significantly greater than that of other categories.
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digram
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diagram
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, at the beginning of the period, the
investment
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 for
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wind
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the wind
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 was around 2bn in 2008,
this
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 figure increased moderately within 2
years
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 to get to over 5bn.
this
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 number keeps fluctuating over the period to
finsh
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finish
 over 10bn. solar
energy
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 had the same amount of
investment
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 in four different
years
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. the majority of people interested in
spend
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 money
for
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on
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wind
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energy
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 over the
years
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while
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 the minority can be considered for
energy
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 smart technologies. the more noticeable feature is that people do not have
intersted
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interest
 in
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investment
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investing
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for
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in
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 solar
energy
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 in 2008 and 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words investment, energy, wind, years with synonyms.
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