Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. เริ่ม 12:40
It is believed by some people that reducing the speed of
vehicles
will affect the
Correct article usage
apply
road
safety
in a positive way. On the other hand
, there could be other ways to upgrade road
safety
which includes
having Correct subject-verb agreement
include
seperate
roads for different types of Correct your spelling
separate
vehicles
or
Correct word choice
apply
seperate
walking paths for pedestrians or improving public transportation. Correct your spelling
separate
This
essay will discuss both sides and provide its opinion.
Road
safety
is considered an important aspect in western
regions. The best way these countries tackle Capitalize word
Western
with
Change preposition
apply
this
is to reduce the maximum speed of the vehicles
. For instance
, the maximum speed in Toronto was reduced from 50 to 30 kilometers
per hour in the city Change the spelling
kilometres
due to
the
traffic and pedestrian Correct article usage
apply
safety
. This
helped in reducing road
accidents in that area and also
the city do
not deal with Change the verb form
does
road
incidents that
often Correct word choice
as
than
Correct word choice
as
they
Correct pronoun usage
it
use
to in the past. Wrong verb form
used
Moreover
, the velocity of the vehicles
should be set according to
person's
ability to control based on the Correct article usage
a person's
hinderences
.
But there are Correct your spelling
hindrances
also
other ways in which the
Correct article usage
apply
road
safety
can be taken care of, without limiting the accelaration
. Having Correct your spelling
acceleration
seperate
paths for different bikes, motorbikes, pedestrians and cars would help in limiting or reducing the number of accidents on roads. Correct your spelling
separate
For example
, in Germany, there are auto bahns
in which there is no speed limit for the Correct your spelling
barns
bans
vehicles
who travel on it because there are seperate
lanes being divided Correct your spelling
separate
according to
speed
of cars or trucks and those who Add an article
the speed
a speed
wants
to drive Change the verb form
want
slow
should be on the right lane. Change the word
slowly
Furthermore
, it is seen that where public transportation is better, individuals do not like to travel seperately
and there is lot less traffic on the streets than usual and they automatically becomes Correct your spelling
separately
more safe
Replace the words
safer
due to
that. This
approach should be used than
to decrease Correct word choice
apply
limit
as transportation is a means to reach Fix the agreement mistake
limits
at
a specific place in time and they cannot reach in time with less velocity.
Change preposition
apply
To conclude
, There are many ways to tackle the
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apply
road
incidents and should be considered by the government as implying a certain provision can have adverse
Add an article
an adverse
affect
on the public Replace the word
effect
along with
some positive aspect
. So, Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
State
should always look for means that do Correct article usage
the State
mimimum impairement
.Correct your spelling
minimum impairment
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