Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. เริ่ม 12:40

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It is believed by some people that reducing the speed of
vehicles
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will affect
the
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road
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safety
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in a positive way.
On the other hand
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, there could be other ways to upgrade
road
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safety
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which
includes
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having
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seperate
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separate

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roads for different types of
vehicles
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or
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seperate
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separate

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walking paths for pedestrians or improving public transportation.
This
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essay will discuss both sides and provide its opinion.
Road
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safety
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is considered an important aspect in
western
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regions. The best way these countries tackle
with
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this
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is to reduce the maximum speed of the
vehicles
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.
For instance
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, the maximum speed in Toronto was reduced from 50 to 30
kilometers
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per hour in the city
due to
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the
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traffic and pedestrian
safety
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.
This
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helped in reducing
road
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accidents in that area and
also
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the city
do
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not deal with
road
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incidents
that
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as

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often
than
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they
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use
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to in the past.
Moreover
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, the velocity of the
vehicles
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should be set
according to
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person's
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ability to control based on the
hinderences
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. But there are
also
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other ways in which
the
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road
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safety
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can be taken care of, without limiting the
accelaration
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. Having
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seperate
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separate

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paths for different bikes, motorbikes, pedestrians and cars would help in limiting or reducing the number of accidents on roads.
For example
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, in Germany, there are auto
bahns
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barns
bans

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in which there is no speed limit for the
vehicles
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who travel on it because there are
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seperate
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separate

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lanes being divided
according to
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speed
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the speed
a speed

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of cars or trucks and those who
wants
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to drive
slow
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should be on the right lane.
Furthermore
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, it is seen that where public transportation is better, individuals do not like to travel
seperately
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separately

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and there is lot less traffic on the streets than usual and they automatically becomes
more safe
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safer

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due to
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that.
This
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approach should be used
than
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to decrease
limit
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limits

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as transportation is a means to reach
at
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a specific place in time and they cannot reach in time with less velocity.
To conclude
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, There are many ways to tackle
the
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road
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incidents and should be considered by the government as implying a certain provision can have
adverse
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affect
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on the public
along with
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some positive
aspect
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. So,
State
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should always look for means that do
mimimum impairement
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minimum impairment

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Be aware of small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'seperate' instead of 'separate' and 'auto bahns' should be 'autobahns'.
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Consider structuring your argument more clearly, making sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows logically from one to the next.
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examples
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • maximum speed
  • speed limits
  • reaction time
  • stopping distance
  • fatality
  • driving habits
  • traffic education
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety
  • enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • technology integration
  • traffic management
  • high-risk areas
  • strategic planning
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