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The diagram below shows the plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summeriz the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summeriz the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The multiple maps compare the development in terms of
room
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 placement in the Central Library between 20 years ago and the present.
Overall
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, there has been an introduction to new rooms and facilities
such
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 as a lecture
room
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, a cafe, and self-service machines. Those facilities impact several rooms to exchange and replace their old functions. Twenty years ago, there was an entrance, tables, and chairs in the centre of the library, specifically in the south and middle part, respectively. On the eastern side of the entrance, there was an enquiry desk that was used for buying tickets and returning
books
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. Meanwhile, on the western side, a reading
room
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 stood there with a lot of newspapers and magazines inside. On the left and right of the tables and chairs, there were sections for
adult
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fiction
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books
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 and
adult
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 non-
fiction
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books
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. In the northwest corner of the library, there was an entertainment
room
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 that contained CDs, videos, and computer games.
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 in the Northeast, it was focused on children's
books
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. In the current state, some rooms have changed their past purposes,
for instance
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, the reading
room
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 has become the computer
room
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, the old computer
room
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 has changed into a children's
fiction
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books
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room
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that is
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 equipped with sofas for storytelling events, and the enquiry desk is redesigned into a cafe. Now, the
adult
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 non-
fiction
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books
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 section has been demolished and rebuilt into an information centre area with self-service machines and
adult
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fiction
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books
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.
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, the old
adult
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fiction
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books
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 section is replaced with a reference
books
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 section.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books, adult, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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