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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You know that a building company is planning to build new houses in immediate proximity to your house. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter – Say how you found out about their plan – Describe how you feel about it – Explain what you hope that they do about it

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of Apply Street and I am writing
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 letter with regard to the advertisement in the local newspaper about the construction of a new residential project in
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 area. As I found out from the published article in Hello London Newspaper,
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 huge construction plan with about 1000 flats and a multi-story shopping mall, will commence from the beginning of September and will
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 for more than 2 years. From my point of view, building
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 colossal project in
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 neighbourhood will bring about some benefits,
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 as better amenities and capital appreciation.
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,
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 process will
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 cause some critical issues for the residents.
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, the noise and dirt from the construction site can be extremely irritating.
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, I hope you will consider these factors
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 building
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 site. It would be great if your company could schedule the working hours during the daytime, so as to avoid disturbing people’s routine lives. Above that, I would really appreciate it if you could share the final plan of
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 project with us, as well. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Tina Ross

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Task Achievement
Try to add more details about your feelings regarding the construction. This will make your letter more personal and engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to improve the flow between sentences, such as 'however', 'firstly', or 'for example'.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which is great for formal writing.
Task Achievement
You clearly stated your concerns and suggestions, showing good task response skills.
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