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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the number of thefts per thousand cars in various countries during the
years
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 1990 and 1999.
Overall
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, all of the four countries faced volatility of car robbery throughout the
years
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,
however
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 during the
last
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 few
years
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 Great Britain and France experienced a declining rate
while
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Canada
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 and
Sweden
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 faced a rising rate. In 1990, Great Britain was the country with the highest robbery rate,
reported with
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reporting
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 almost 20 thefts, a stark contrast to France with a little over 5 thefts.
However
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, around the year 1996, either started to see a reduced number of robberies,
that
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which
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 keeps lowering to a little above 15 for Great Britain and to just over 5 for France after previously
experienced
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experiencing
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 its highest at almost 10.
On the other hand
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, in
Canada
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 and
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Sweden
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Sweden,
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 the events of car stealing keep increasing during the
last
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 four
years
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.
Sweden
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begun
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 with almost 10 and
Canada
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 a little lower in 1990,
then
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Sweden
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 rose to almost 15,
while
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Canada
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 returned
at
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to
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 slightly above 5 in 1990 after
experienced
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experiencing
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 a decrease in 1993 to around 5.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, canada, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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