You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph compares the number of thefts per thousand cars in various countries during the
years
1990 and 1999.
Overall
, all of the four countries faced volatility of car robbery throughout the
years
,
however
during the
last
few
years
Great Britain and France experienced a declining rate
while
Canada
and
Sweden
faced a rising rate. In 1990, Great Britain was the country with the highest robbery rate,
reported with
Wrong verb form
reporting
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almost 20 thefts, a stark contrast to France with a little over 5 thefts.
However
, around the year 1996, either started to see a reduced number of robberies,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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keeps lowering to a little above 15 for Great Britain and to just over 5 for France after previously
experienced
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experiencing
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its highest at almost 10.
On the other hand
, in
Canada
and
Sweden
Add a comma
Sweden,
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the events of car stealing keep increasing during the
last
four
years
.
Sweden
begun
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began
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with almost 10 and
Canada
a little lower in 1990,
then
Sweden
rose to almost 15,
while
Canada
returned
at
Change preposition
to
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slightly above 5 in 1990 after
experienced
Wrong verb form
experiencing
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a decrease in 1993 to around 5.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, canada, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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