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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts give information about UK
students
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 spending and where their
money
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 comes from in 2016.
Overall
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 we can see that
students
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 spend nearly half of their
money
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 on their rent and the most common source of income is from a student loan. On average,
students
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 spent around £800 a
monthly
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month
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 in 2016 and nearly half was spending on rent. Apart from spending on other things, the next highest section is food and
students
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 spent £124 on
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 on average. Spending on bills, travelling and socialising were all similar and
students
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 spent £52-£69 on these things a month. Regarding student income, 80% of
students
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 in the UK receive a student loan. The next most common way of getting
money
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 is through relatives and
part time
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 employment with around 70% of
students
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 receiving
money
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 from them.
Also
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 similar
were
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was
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 the
numbers
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number
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 of
students
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 receiving
money
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 from savings and overdrafts at around 40%. The least common way of receiving
money
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 is from grants and funding.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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