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The diagram illustrates different stages in the procces of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. The procces shows how prepared tea in two other steps.

The diagram illustrates different stages in the procces of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. The procces shows how prepared tea in two other steps.
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The diagram illustrates different stages in the
procces
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process
 of Pu-erh Raw
Tea
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 and Ripe
Tea
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. The
procces
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process
 shows how prepared
tea
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 in two other steps. At the beginning of the
procces
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process
, pan
fryng
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frying
fry
 of
inactivasion
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inactivation
 enzymes rolling to
dryng
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drying
 under the sun.
Then
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 loose raw
tea
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sent
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was sent
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two
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in two
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 different preparations.
First
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 way is
compression
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the compression
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Pu-erh
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of Pu-erh
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 Raw
Tea
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 and
aging
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ageing
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 by storage.
At the end
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 of
this
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 process a vintagePu-erh Raw
Tea
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 is produced.
Second
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 way is
production
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the production
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tea
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of tea
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 which begins
fermantation
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fermentation
 by Mold of loose raw
tea
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. After that, Loose ripe
tea
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 is compressed and
created
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creates
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 Pu-erh Ripe
tea
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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