As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Many people believe that the
papers
will become
obsolute
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obsolete
absolute
in the future,
due to
the increasing popularity of the internet.
On the other hand
, conventional
newspaper
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newspapers
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has
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lost
its
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allure somewhat to the young generation, as they think old media is biased. From my point of view, though it will not be easy,
but
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newspapers
will eventually die out.
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not
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only allowed us access to many sources of
informations
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, it has given us numerous independent
news
platforms
. These online
medias
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media
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have been reporting their
news
without any corporate influences or sponsors, but with peoples'
donation
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donations
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and online advertisement revenues.
As a result
,
public
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tend
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to believe that they are unbiased and
comfortabily
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comfortably
comfortable
consume their contents.
In addition
to that, these online
platforms
frequently point out the
biasness
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biases
of
the
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traditional
papers
.
Such
medias
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are
,
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The Young Turks and The Tucker Carlson Show. Though, for the same fact that traditional
papers
have corporate backing, it is hard for these online
medias
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to compete against them.
In addition
to unbiased reporting, online media
platforms
can provide better quality
informations
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information
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than the
papers
. Traditional
newspapers
are bound by their limited word quotas and pages,
whereas
online
newsportals
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news portals
,
such
as blogs and YouTube videos,
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no limits on words or pages.
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they can provide videos that can explain the
news
better.
Such
precedence was created during the 2016 United
States'
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presidential election. At that time, candidates preferred to attend various podcasts,
such
as Joe Rogan Experience than giving interviews to
newspapers
. To
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, as the internet is reaching rapidly to every doorstep,
the
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online media
platforms
are becoming increasingly popular.
However
, fighting against
corporate backed
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giant
newspapers
will be difficult for these growing
news
outlets.
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I believe,
if
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that if
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people
continues
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to reject these traditional
papers
, online journalism will extinct
them
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apply
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in future.
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grammar
Work on grammar and sentence structures to improve the readability and clarity of your essay. For example, 'comfortabily' should be 'comfortably' and 'informations' should be 'information.'
task response
Ensure that you cover all parts of the task clearly. While you mentioned the influence of the internet and declining appeal of newspapers, providing stronger specific examples would bolster your argument.
cohesion
Maintain consistency in your argument throughout the essay. Repeated statements about the decline of newspapers could be joined to avoid redundancy and enhance clarity.
introduction conclusion
Strive for a more compelling introduction and conclusion to increase the strength of your arguments. Make sure both sections are clearly linked to the main points you discuss.
task response
The essay addresses the task topic and offers a clear stance on the future of newspapers vs. online media.
task response examples
The essay includes specific examples such as The Young Turks, The Tucker Carlson Show, and Joe Rogan Experience, making the arguments more credible.
structure
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each discussing distinct points in support of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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