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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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contemporary
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 era, the number of
people
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 longing
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 about the historical background of the
accomodation
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accommodation
 they wish to live in is rising. Given that
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 phenomenon stems from
people
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 wanting to ensure a reliable source of investment and safety, it can be pursued
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 several ways that
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further
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 with, it is every human right to be aware of the novelty of their
accomodation
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accommodation
.
This
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 is mainly because individuals want to figure
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out if
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 the place is worth investing
on
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in
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. A historical building in Paris
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, will cost
people
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 a generous sum of money.
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,
people
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 being aware of its rich historic value, they would
reagard
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regard
 it quite reasonable and
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, make a satisfactory purchase.
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, since the materials used in old monuments
maybe
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 eroded or decrepit, it would pose a threat to
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's safety in case of natural disasters
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 as
earthquake
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. Take suburban houses as an example; which
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 constructed
by
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of
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 clay or wood years ago, and
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 proved not
being
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 resistant to extreme
weathers
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, highlighting the
neccesity
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necessity
 folks may feel to search for an
accomodation's
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accomodation
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 background. Meanwhile, individuals are able to make sure of the value and
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reliability of their preferred place by implementing several measures. One of
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this
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 approaches
being
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the
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 real estate agencies,
provides
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people
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 with relevant information, fostering a sense of confidence in them. Alternatively, as many
people
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 find it quite hard to trust these agencies, they'd rather conduct
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research on their own, whether by exploring the Internet or asking the locals about the information they wish to acquire. To illustrate, Iranian
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 have the habit of visiting the neighbourhood within which they desire to buy a house in order to conduct
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scrutiny;
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, they often declare a satisfactory purchase thanks to the research they had carried out beforehand.
To conclude
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, every mankind may question the history behind a house they tend to
resite
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reside
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 in because they feel the need to ensure their families' security,
coupled with
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 financial reliabilities. In terms of doing so, they would get
assisstance
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assistance
 from real estate agencies or gain information from local
people
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 and online sources.

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The essay could benefit from a clearer division of ideas between paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph addresses a single main point to enhance readability.
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There are a few grammatical and spelling errors, such as 'accomodation' instead of 'accommodation' and 'reagard' instead of 'regard'. Proofreading the text would help reduce these issues.
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Your introduction successfully outlines the topic and presents the main reasons. However, consider making the conclusion slightly more comprehensive by summarizing the key points discussed to give it a stronger ending.
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The essay demonstrates a solid understanding of the topic and provides relevant reasons and examples.
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Your vocabulary and use of varied sentence structures is commendable, making the essay engaging and interesting to read.
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Good job on providing specific examples, like the historical buildings in Paris and suburban houses, which help support your arguments.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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