Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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games

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are really famous for all children and adults in numerous

contries

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countries

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, mothers and fathers

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to them that computer

games

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contain some bad values. In my opinion, I agree with what some parents think about

comutrer

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computer

games

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however

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, it seems to me that it has some

benefit

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. There are two main reasons why I agree with fathers and mothers who

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that computer

games

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are harmful. The first reason is that some kids are always busy with it

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for

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their whole day. The other reason

that is

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some children get to know new bad online friends and copy their

behavior

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. Apart from the benefit I believe that,

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The essay does not fully address the prompt. You should expand your discussion on the potential benefits and harms of computer games with more specific examples.

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The introductory paragraph gives a clear indication of your stance, which is a positive aspect.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

110 words

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Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?