The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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The bar graph below illustrates
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the
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number
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of
incidents
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and
injuries
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each 100
million
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travellers who commuted by different types of transportation in 2002.
It is clear that
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demand response saw the highest
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of
incidents
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and
injuries
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while
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,
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that of commuter
rail
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was the lowest in 2002. The figure for
incidents
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in commuter
rail
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was 20 per
million
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whereas
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, that of demand response was higher at 225 per
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PMT.
In addition
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, the
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of
incidents
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in light
rail
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was equal to that of bus at 76 per
million
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PMT.
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, in heavy
rail
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, the
number
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of
incidents
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stood at 51 per
million
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while
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that of
injuries
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was lower at 35. The most statistical
injuries
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belonged to demand response 173 per
million
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.
However
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, the figure for commuter
rail
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was lower at 17. The
number
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of
injuries
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for bus and light
rail
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was 66 and 39 per
million
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, incidents, injuries, million, rail with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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