The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
The bar graph below illustrates
comparison
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the
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number
of
incidents
and
injuries
each 100
million
travellers who commuted by different types of transportation in 2002.
It is clear that
demand response saw the highest
number
of
incidents
and
injuries
while
,
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that of commuter
rail
was the lowest in 2002. The figure for
incidents
in commuter
rail
was 20 per
million
whereas
, that of demand response was higher at 225 per
million
PMT.
In addition
, the
number
of
incidents
in light
rail
was equal to that of bus at 76 per
million
PMT.
Also
, in heavy
rail
, the
number
of
incidents
stood at 51 per
million
while
that of
injuries
was lower at 35. The most statistical
injuries
belonged to demand response 173 per
million
.
However
, the figure for commuter
rail
was lower at 17. The
number
of
injuries
for bus and light
rail
was 66 and 39 per
million
, respectively.
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