The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
The bar graph below illustrates
comparison
Correct article usage
a comparison
the
Change preposition
of the
number
of incidents
and injuries
each 100 million
travellers who commuted by different types of transportation in 2002.
It is clear that
demand response saw the highest number
of incidents
and injuries
while
,
that of commuter Remove the comma
apply
rail
was the lowest in 2002.
The figure for incidents
in commuter rail
was 20 per million
whereas
, that of demand response was higher at 225 per million
PMT. In addition
, the number
of incidents
in light rail
was equal to that of bus at 76 per million
PMT. Also
, in heavy rail
, the number
of incidents
stood at 51 per million
while
that of injuries
was lower at 35.
The most statistical injuries
belonged to demand response 173 per million
. However
, the figure for commuter rail
was lower at 17. The number
of injuries
for bus and light rail
was 66 and 39 per million
, respectively.Submitted by www.marzieh.eidi on
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