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Some people say that learning a foreign language is a very difficult task. What are the most difficult things about learning a foreign language? What is the best way to overcome them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There has long been a saying that acquiring a
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 or mother tongue is considered an extremely challenging and daunting task. It is beyond doubt that there are several factors that contribute to the said claim, namely unfamiliarity with the foreign
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 essay will delve deeper into the underlying reasons for the difficulties encountered by
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 and resolutions to surmount those challenges. Unfamiliarity with
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 second or foreign
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 is the prime obstacle
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learners
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 journey. Pursuant to a linguistic study conducted by the Education University of Hong Kong, over 70% of the respondents propose that they find
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 learning particularly difficult owing to the lack of association between the foreign
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 and the mother tongue. Specifically,
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 as filial piety
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 not present in English culture, which sometimes makes it hard for
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learners
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learners
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: difficulty in retaining
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vocabulary and grammar. Linked with the first point, as people are not acquainted with the origin and rationale behind the
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, how the sentence is constructed, and where
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the idioms like ‘bite the bullet’ and ‘burn the midnight oil’ originate from, many
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learners
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 express their frustration when attempting to learn a foreign
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 effectively. To nip the problem in the bud, it is of paramount importance to understand the culture and rationale underneath to better retain the grammatical structures and lexicons that have been introduced in formal and informal educational contexts. By way of illustration, when learning a
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, English, it would be most memorable if
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 comprehend the idiom like ‘bite the bullet’ coming from the context of the war where soldiers had to get through tough times. To recapitulate, learning a foreign
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 is a very difficult and challenging task given their unfamiliarity with the foreign
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 and hard retention of the different facets of the
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coherence cohesion
Consider enhancing the logical flow between the stages of the argument. For instance, more connective phrases could be used to guide the reader from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Although the essay provides detailed examples and explanations, it could benefit from a more structured approach to paragraph development. Clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph can make the arguments easier to follow.
task achievement
Be careful with the length and complexity of sentences. While they contribute to a sophisticated argument, simplifying where possible can enhance readability.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the context and outlines the main points to be discussed.
relevant specific examples
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and includes relevant and specific examples, such as the reference to filial piety and idiomatic expressions.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion succinctly sums up the main arguments, effectively reinforcing the points made.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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