The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at lea
The given chart illustrates the
visitors
by their species in percentage.
While
, the table below shows
average
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the average
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length of
arriving
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at
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in
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country
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the country
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,
preferable
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the preferable
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place to live and the activities that are mainly done by
visitors
.
Overall
, the most amount of tourists came from Europe, second place
ia
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is
taken by
US
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the US
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. Asians
most
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are most
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likely to sightsee the sights that they visit, meanwhile,
visitors
from other regions do
serfing
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surfing
serving
in their holiday.
Firstly
, Eastern travellers spend 7 days. As their most popular accommodation, it is
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definitely
definetily
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definitely
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a 5-star
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5-star
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hotel. They hold the
last
place among other countries visiting the
country
with 10%.
Secondly
, American
visitors
spend
fortnight
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a fortnight
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of their vacation. They prefer to stay at 4-star hotels, not as superior as
asians
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Asians
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. 35% is the stat, which American tourists take in visiting
country
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the country
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, being runner-ups.
In addition
,
their
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the
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main activity that they do in
country
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the country
a country
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they travel to is the same as
far-easterns
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the far-easterns
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, sightseeing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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