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The table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and re-porting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and re-porting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the data of Kiwi's export value in dollars from New Zealand to five distinct countries including Japan, China, Mexico, Russia, and Saudi Arabia in the
period
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 of 2010, 2011, and 2012.
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, it can be seen that Japan dominated with the highest counts among three different periods of years compared with the other countries.
On the other hand
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, Saudi Arabia commanded the least portions over the years. The data depicts the amount of value exports of Kiwi to Japan which
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subsequently
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 increased over the
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 from $271 in 2010, $287 in 2011, to $325 in 2012 (million).
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, China and Russia
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 experienced a continuous rise during the
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.
On the other hand
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, Mexico witnessed a fluctuation count, dropped from $6 to $2,4 million in 2011 but increased to $3 million in 2012. Commanded as the least share of value, Saudi Arabia gained less than $300,000 in the first
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 and decreased sharply to $82,000 in the
last
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period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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