Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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, Salman Khan, a famous celebrity in India, every year donates half of his income to his NGO ‘Being Human’ which works for the children’s Linking Words
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, a renowned elite person, Ratan Tata has many small businesses in developed countries and gives the opportunity to Linking Words
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, Mukesh Ambani, the world’s 7th richest person, started a company named JIO in India in 2016 and employed more than 20,000 Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite