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Today, many people believe that governments should be pay more for scientific researches. To what extend do you agree with the view expressed?

#people #governments
Nowadays
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 people believe that
governments
 should
be pay
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 more than commercial
organisations
 for scientific
researches
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research
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.
Overall
, I believe that
governments
 will give more benefits if they pay
on
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these researches
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this research
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 which I will explain
it
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in
this
 essay.
Governments
 have a lot of duties that
sum
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some
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 of them do not have enough importance about how much they are expensive. For
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, in medicine courses,
governmentmental
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government mental
organisations
, have to survey
on
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some general illnesses,
such
 as
blood-sugur
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blood sugar
. It is not unexpected that they do not have any
incomes
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, but
it is clear that
 the
datas
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data
wich
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which
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excel
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 from the surveys can be
crutial
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crucial
crucially
critical
helpful
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and helpful
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 in a variety of their tasks like their politics in
look
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 after adults to avoid of expense
for
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their illness in the future.
In addition
,
governments
 have some secret topics that they do not want to appeal
for
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 others.
For instance
, in the army of each country,
thay
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they
 follow the secret projects to become more strong against attacks of their enemies.
On the other hand
,
the
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most
researches
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research
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 in commercial
organisations
,
focuse
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focus
focuses
focusing
 on
the
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development and
catch
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 more income. So,
the
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society should not expect that
these researches
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have
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 a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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for
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them
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apply
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. they pay
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for
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fo
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for
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 the
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research
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researches
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research
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 and articles for their goals
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and
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an
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and
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 aims if the pros
will be
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are
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 more than
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the
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the
 cons. For
examples
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, a company may
alocate
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allocate
locate
 a lot of their
budjet
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budget
on
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to
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 the
department
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 of
the
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research and
development
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.
However
, they believe that these investments help them in the future. In conclusion, I strongly that
governments
 have to pay more
on
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 scientific research than commercial
organisations
,
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 because the most benefits and returns of them
blong
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belong
 to the whole population of their countries.
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