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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measurements can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

#world #measurements #governments #individuals
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During
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 modern era, all countries are faced with the ongoing issue of global warming and the negative effect it has on the climate.
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 phenomenon leads to a rise in the earth's temperature and can cause severe weather events.
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 essay will analyse the root causes of global warming and discuss how
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government
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 and citizens can contribute to preventing global warming. Temperature change can occur
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 natural causes,
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 it is most commonly the result of human activities
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 as the burning of fossils, deforestation, and industrialisation that increases the level of greenhouse gases emitted.
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, in my country, people are still dependent on coal to cook, generators to get electricity and cars using fuel as a mode of transport.
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 , factories promote the emission of toxic gases and fumes that are detrimental to the environment. The
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 individuals all have a role to play in mitigating the rate at which pollution is affecting the earth.
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 can implement policies to reduce toxic gas emissions from companies and promote the
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 of renewable energy by subsidising companies that are promoting the
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 of solar panels.
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, individuals can reduce their carbon footprint by learning from countries like Norway which prioritises the
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 of bikes and public transport. In Conclusion, global warming is an issue faced by many countries caused by the over-reliance on appliances emitting greenhouse gases. The problem can be rectified
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 by individuals improving their ecological impact and by the
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 encouraging the
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 of renewable energy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • carbon taxing
  • deforestation
  • industrial pollution
  • reforestation
  • conservation projects
  • public transportation
  • sustainable products
  • advocacy
  • raising public awareness
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