This bar chart shows the holiday preferences of four countries in 2018.

This

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bar graph illustrates the favourite holiday destinations (skiing, beach,

city

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, hiking and stay at

home

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) of Australians, New Zealanders, Chinese and South Koreans in the year 2018. Units are measured in percentages

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while

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skiing was the most preferred activity in all the countries, staying at

home

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was the least sought after. With regards to New Zealand, the most popular activity on vacations was hiking at around 38%.

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is followed by skiing and visiting the beach at 30% and 20% respectively, New Zealanders did not prefer going to the

city

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and staying at

home

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On the contrary

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, the Australians equally enjoyed both skiing and hiking the most (about 26%). They like visiting the beach more than the New Zealanders at 25%. Analysing the graph

further

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, the South Koreans are inclined to ski making it the most popular activity at 30%. They equally enjoy the other given activities. Regarding China, most people like going to the

city

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(precisely 30%) and they in general prefer less demanding tasks

such

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as visiting the

city

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and staying at

home

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, home with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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176 words

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