The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
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The diagram illustrates the stages
how
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of how
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the
sugar
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was produced by using
sugar
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cane.
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, the stages of making
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane
beginned
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begin
with growth and harvest and
ends
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with producing edible candy form. The cropping up of complete
sugar
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cane takes around 12-18 months which is
then
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harvested with the help of farmers and cutting trackters.
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,
tranferred
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transferred
into
crushing
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a crushing
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machine as
whole
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a whole
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stem to convert
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it as
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as
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into
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juice.
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it will purify
essence
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the essence
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liquid by using the
limostone
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limestone
filter.
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, it undergoes
heating
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a heating
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process until the juice becomes syrup. Again, the centrifuge splits the
sugar
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crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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.
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, it
modified
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as
sugar
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after drying and cooling.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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