The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram illustrates the stages
how
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the
sugar
was produced by using
sugar
cane.
Overall
, the stages of making
sugar
from
sugar
cane
beginned
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begin
with growth and harvest and
ends
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with producing edible candy form. The cropping up of complete
sugar
cane takes around 12-18 months which is
then
harvested with the help of farmers and cutting trackters.
Then
,
tranferred
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transferred
into
crushing
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a crushing
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machine as
whole
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a whole
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stem to convert
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it as
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as
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into
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juice.
Next,
it will purify
essence
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the essence
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liquid by using the
limostone
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limestone
filter.
Furthermore
, it undergoes
heating
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a heating
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process until the juice becomes syrup. Again, the centrifuge splits the
sugar
crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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.
Finally
, it
modified
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is modified
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as
sugar
after drying and cooling.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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