You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: To Whom it May Concern,
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to buy a
apartment in Halifax, Canada.
I'Change the article
an
m
Harman. I have
got my job Unnecessary verb
apply
last
week in Halifax so me, my wife and 2 kids are moving to Canada. I'm
web
developer engineer.
Correct article usage
a web
Moreover
, I'm
looking for 2 bedrooms
flat. It must have a living room Fix the agreement mistake
bedroom
detached
with Correct word choice
apply
balcony
,Correct article usage
a balcony
a
good standard kitchen. It would be great if there Correct word choice
and a
is
a Wrong verb form
was
play room
for kids. Correct your spelling
playroom
Furthermore
, I also
need a parking slot. I'm
planning to buy my car after two months.
In addition
to this
, I would prefer my apartment location near to
my work; between Bedford Change preposition
apply
park
to Hilton Capitalize word
Park
hills
. My work location is on Surrey Capitalize word
Hills
hills
. I would Capitalize word
Hills
also
be appreciateable
if you Correct your spelling
appreciatable
appreciate able
appreciate-able
can
find Wrong verb form
could
near
to Correct pronoun usage
it near
Correct article usage
the kids
kids
school. It is Change noun form
kids'
kid's
positive
key point for me to pick up and drop off my children.
I'Add an article
a positive
the positive
m
looking forward for
your response.
Change preposition
to
Your
truly,
HarmanCorrect the word
Yours
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task achievement
You could enhance your letter by providing more specific details about your job and your family's needs. It would make your request more compelling and personalized.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure the consistent use of punctuation and prepositions. For instance, the correct phrase is 'I got a job offer' instead of 'I have got my job.'
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear logical structure, making it easy to follow your request.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, which is suitable for addressing a property agent.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,