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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Those 4 pie charts demonstrate the sort of
power
 used for electricity production in 4 countries
due to
 5 years from 2003 to 2008. We can divide those 4 countries into 2 groups. The first - nuclear
power
 users, and the second - non-nuclear
power
 users. The first group includes Sweden and India. In
Sweden
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the
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a
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 significant part (more than 50%) of the sources, which is
use
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 for electricity generation, is the rechargeable resource - hydropower. In
the
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second
place
 is
the
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nuclear
power
 (almost 50%), and in
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third
place
 with 4% is
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fossil
fuel
. In India the statement is controversial. The main source is
the
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fossil
fuel
 with 82%,
then
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
 takes
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place
 with 15%, and the
last
place
 is
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nuclear
power
 with 3%. The second group encompasses Morocco and Vietnam. In
Morocco
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Morocco,
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 the paramount source is
the
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
 - 97%, and the 3%of
the
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fossil
fuel
. In Vietnam the essential product for electricity production is
the
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fossil
fuel
 with 60%, and only
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40% of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
.
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