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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Those 4 pie charts demonstrate the sort of
power
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 used for electricity production in 4 countries
due to
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 5 years from 2003 to 2008. We can divide those 4 countries into 2 groups. The first - nuclear
power
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 users, and the second - non-nuclear
power
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 users. The first group includes Sweden and India. In
Sweden
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the
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 significant part (more than 50%) of the sources, which is
use
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 for electricity generation, is the rechargeable resource - hydropower. In
the
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second
place
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 is
the
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nuclear
power
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 (almost 50%), and in
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third
place
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 with 4% is
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fossil
fuel
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. In India the statement is controversial. The main source is
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fossil
fuel
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 with 82%,
then
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the
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 takes
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place
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 with 15%, and the
last
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place
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 is
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nuclear
power
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 with 3%. The second group encompasses Morocco and Vietnam. In
Morocco
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Morocco,
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 the paramount source is
the
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 - 97%, and the 3%of
the
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fossil
fuel
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. In Vietnam the essential product for electricity production is
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fossil
fuel
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 with 60%, and only
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40% of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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