The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
The flow chart illustrates the production of
ethanol
through various stages involved
along with
several tools used.
Further
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it demonstrates how
this
ethanol
is utilized which is essential for vehicles.
Overall
, it is apparent from the diagrams that the production of it involves undergoing several stages
such
as harvesting, pre-processing and adding microbes .
This
ethanol
is
then
used as fuel for the transport.
To begin
, trees and plants that receive energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide are grown to maturity . In the second step, there was harvesting which plants and trees
are
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collected by tractors and brought for pre-processing by farmers .
Next,
after the pre-processing process, the items are sent to the next process for cellulose .
then
in the
laboratory
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it is divided into "processing" to obtain sugar.
At
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next
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the next
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stage,
Ethanol
is obtained by adding microbes to ready-made sugar.
Ethanol
is used for cars , heavy tracks and
airplanes
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. All three vehicles emit carbon dioxide when they operate and the resulting carbon dioxide is consumed by plants and trees,
thus
creating a biological cycle
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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