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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the top five reasons
people
 have said why they prefer to go to
work
 by car or by bicycle.
It is clear that
 a large percentage of
people
 acknowledge that they choose to go to
work
 by bicycle because of their health and fitness, and
also
bicycles
 have less pollution,
while
 the majority of
people
 prefer to drive to
work
instead
 of riding a bike because of the convenience they chose
cars
 over
bicycles
. 30% of
people
 who ride a bicycle to go to
work
 said they prefer
bicycles
 because of their health and fitness, and the percentage for less pollution reasons is the same.
While
 40% of
people
 who use
cars
 to drive to
work
 said they prefer
cars
 because they are more comfortable, 21% of individuals said they chose vehicles because of the distance to
work
. 13% of bike riders said
bicycles
 are faster than
cars
. Interestingly, a similar percentage of
people
 acknowledged that
cars
 are quicker than
bicycles
. Other important reasons why
people
 choose to ride
instead
 of bike are because
bicycles
 are cheap and have no parking problems, which provide 13% and 15%, respectively. 14% of
people
 use
cars
 because they must carry things to
work
,
while
 only 11% of drivers said they prefer
cars
 because of their safety.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work, bicycles, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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