The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the attendee

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for five activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

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, the introduction of film

club

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clubs

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, table tennis and musical performances was more successful than others, with film

club

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clubs

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consistently holding the top spot in popularity over the period examined. Amateur dramatics,

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, saw a significant decline

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martial arts remained relatively unchanged in participation. The participant

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of the film club started with around 65

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in 2000, and

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it experienced a slight dip to 60 participants by 2010 but rebounded to its original number by 2020, showing enduring appeal.

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also

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shown in Martial arts as its participation has remained steady, starting and ending the period with about 35

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, amateur dramatics have seen a sharp decline.

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attracting 25 participants, the

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steadily dropped to a mere 5 by 2020. Regarding the two leisure activities that gained traction, there were 15 participants in tennis in 2000, after which the

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surged to 55 by 2020.

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, it was not until 2005

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that musical

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performances were introduced to the centre and it had been quite successful as its

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gradually increased to 15

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at the end

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of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, members with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

209 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

participation rates
trends
significant increases/decreases
stable numbers
fluctuations
overall participation
comparison
activities
social centre
Melbourne
participants
highlight
report
graph illustrates/demonstrates
20-year period
key features
main features
statistical data
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