The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The given two maps
illustrates
the changes in the Local Change the verb form
illustrate
Museum
at the north-east
corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957,1987,2007. Correct your spelling
northeast
It is clear that
the Museum
in 1957 did not contain neither
a car park or cafe.
Rewrite the sentence
did not contain either
contained neither
According to
the maps, there were trees beside the road in 1957,However
, it got removed in 2007 to maintain a car park on the right side and a museum
shop on the left side,In addition
,the significant difference was when the road that leeds
to the entrance hall was Correct your spelling
leads
also
removed.
Secondly
, an educational centre was added to the museum
, which is an advantage for the place to educate visitor
on the history and Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
artifacts
Change the spelling
artefacts
on
Change preposition
of
this
place.
Overall
, the main goal for people organizing the museum
is earning money from some places,for instance
, car parks and the cafe, Nonetheless
, the organizers were careless about the environment due to
the removal of trees.Submitted by yazanalt523 on
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