The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different

sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons with relevant.
The bar charts compare data about how people
gain
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energy from a variety of sources between 1985 and 2003.
Overall
, oil was the main resource which provided us with energy in 1985 and 2003 respectively,
however
, oil demand decreased, the reverse was true for natural gas by the end of the period. Following that, natural
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, coal and other renewable origin increased over time. In 1985, the main focus was on grease at 52% because it is the most significant item that we get strength from. There are
also
essential efficiency
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such
as nuclear and natural gas with a usage percentage of 22% and 13% respectively. The average share of other energy resources is only about 5%.
On the other hand
, in 2003, compared to 1985 the situation did not change much,
however
, the grease spirit and nuclear efficiency declined to 39% and 17% respectively. On the other side, the proportion of using natural
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rose to 23%.
Moreover
, coal power and other renewable origin increased to 13% and 4% cooperatively.
Nevertheless
, the hydrogen staff remained unchanged.
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