The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.
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The diagram illustrates how some of the Sun’s
energy
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is trapped in the
atmosphere
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by greenhouse gases.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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CO2 is released to the
atmosphere
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by human intervention and that most of the Sun’s
energy
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managed to leave the planet.
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with, not all of the Sun’s
energy
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enters the Earth’s
atmosphere
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, some of it is reflected by the
atmosphere
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.
Rest
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of the rays
enters
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the
atmosphere
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and
heats
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heat
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the Earth’s surface, after which some of them are reflected into space and some of them back into the
atmosphere
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. Greenhouse gases,
such
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as carbon dioxide are emitted into the air by human activities. Chopping down
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trees
release
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releases
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the CO2 that had been stored in them. Fumes produced by vehicles, namely trucks, cars, and ships, contribute to the carbon dioxide emission.
Subsequently
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, these gases capture the remaining
energy
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that had been reflected by the Earth’s surface leading to a substantial increase of the atmospheric temperature.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, atmosphere with synonyms.
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