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The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
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The maps demonstrate the information on how changes
made
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 in the local
museum
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 at the northeast corner of Hartford
street
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Street
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 and Redcliff
street
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Street
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 in various periods 1957, 1987 and 2007.
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,
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trees
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 were removed and
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museum
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the museum
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 was expanded by new sections. In detail, in 1987, the middle of the
museum
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 had three sections but it was expanded by six cabins.
Entrance
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The entrance
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 hall area was shifted
by
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to
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northwest
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the northwest
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 side in 2007. In the southeast,
trees
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 were removed and the
museum
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 was expanded. To the southwest, two
trees
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 were eliminated and new car parking was introduced in 2007.
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cafe
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a cafe
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, local history room, special exhibition, education
center
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centre
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,
museum
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 shop and reception areas were built in 2007. In the northeast of the
museum
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 in 1957, three big
trees
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 were expelled and the new
museum
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 was extended by new features for readers.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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