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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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 graph provided reveals the average monthly
change
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 in the outlay of three metals over 2014.
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, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the highest percentage of
change
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 in price belongs to
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nickle
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nickel
 in the first
month
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. In stark contrast, the lowest proportion of
change
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 in cost goes to
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nickle
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nickel
 in the sixth
month
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.
According to
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 what is shown, it is
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 interesting to note that the trend of
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nickle
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nickel
 has fluctuated wildly,
while
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 the trends of copper and zinc have fluctuated slightly during 2014.
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, the trend of
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nickle
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nickel
 plunged to -3% in the first
hafe
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half
 of the year
afterwide
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after wide
 that of
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nickle
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nickel
 increased gradually in the latter
hafe
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half
have
 of the year.
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, by far the highest portion of
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change
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the change
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 in
value
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the value
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 of zinc was 3% in the second
month
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as well as
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 that of
change
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 in
price
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the price
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 of copper was 2% in the first
month
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, nickle, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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