The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The
given
Verb problem
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pie charts illustrate data about the police budget from 2017 to 2018 in Britain. And
also
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specifies where the money comes from and how it is expended.
Overall
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, the greatest expansion
are
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is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject the greatest expansion. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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Salaries(officers and staff).
However
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, technology increased almost 1 time which is interesting. uniquely, Buildings and transport remained in the same position. National government
and
Correct word choice
apply

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seems to be the most gigantic resource among the three resources(Local taxes and other sources). Regarding the sources, in 2017 and 2018,
national
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the national

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government
plays
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played

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big
Add an article
a big

The noun phrase big role seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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role towards total( 304.7 million pounds,
318.6
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and 318.6

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million pounds respectively) followed by local taxes(91.2m and 102.5m) and Other sources(38m and 38.5m). In 2017 and 2018, police spent the most money on servants' salaries,
nevertheless
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, it declined slightly from 75% to 69% within a year.
In contrast
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, the government spends
least
Correct article usage
the least

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on technological equipment(8% to 14%). Interestingly, they still retained the building and transport with 17% of both years.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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