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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a areport for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a areport for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The supplied line graph indicates information about how
wheat
 was exported in three various
region
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 over a
five year
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 period. It can be clearly seen that
,
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the highest amount of
wheat
 exported was for Canada.
However
,in
Australia
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Australia,
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 the community did not tend to send
wheat
to
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abroad,which was the least amount of exportation over the period. In 1985,just under 20
million
tonnes
wheat
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of wheat
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 was transported from Canada to other countries and
then
 It fluctuated
sharpy
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sharply
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 from 1985 to 1990.Surprisingly,in 1988 precisely 25
million
tonnes
wheat
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of wheat
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sent
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 abroad from Canada.(Which was the highest measure of exportation over the whole period).Next,the level of
wheat
 exported from
European
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 Community was roughly 16
million
tonnes
 in 1985 and after a modest decline,It rose gradually in European populations between 1986 and 1990 and
finally
 reached
to
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over 20
million
tonnes
at the end
 of the trend. In Australia,exactly 15
million
tonnes
wheat
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 was shipped to other areas in 1985 and
then
,It climbed slightly to nearly 16
million
tonnes
 in 1986.
Aftreward
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Afterwards
,the quantity of
wheat
 which was transported from Australia experienced a modest fall from 1986 to 1990 and
then
 hit the bottom of the level to just around 12
million
tonnes
 in 1990.(Which was the least amount of exportation over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wheat exports
  • trend
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • fluctuations
  • periods of stability
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • similarities
  • differences
  • key points
  • potential reasons
  • climatic conditions
  • agricultural policies
  • market demand
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