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The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year.

#roads #vehicle #drivers #test #year
I to some extent reinforce the new rule that every
driver
 should retake their
driver
's licence each year to make the
road
 safer.
while
this
 approach has some merits, it
also
 faces
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significant drawbacks that make it an imperfect solution.
For instance
, an elderly
driver
 facing mandatory annual driving tests has several concerns
such
 kind of test anxiety, financial burden, discrimination by age and focus on testing over training. Sitting on the exam
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 pressure, especially, for elders it can be stressful. declining cognitive abilities or unfamiliar test formats could lead to anxiety and impact their performance, Even though, their actual driving skills are adequate. Anymore older
drivers
 might be perceived as ageist. declining of driving abilities can occur at any age
due to
 various factors, not only age. In fact, one test bill is equal to the minimum wage, in Uzbekistan.
This
also
 frustrates elders .
On the Other hand
, young
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adults concentrate on passing exams but there are more important aspects than
this
 they should focus on. The first one is Adapting to different conditions like weather,
road
 conditions, and traffic all play a role in safe driving.
For example
, driving defensively in bad weather, at night or in heavy traffic is essential.
According to
 the latest research
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all data about vehicle accidents came from
road
 conditions, Most
drivers
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 avoid trenchs and holes in the
road
 and there occur bad consequences.
This
 kind of accident is more occur on a mountain pass, Even
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driver
 has high-level driving skills. There are other alternatives to improve safety on a
road
, Building Toll roads, enhancing
publictranportation
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public transportation
 among the cities, establishing severe penalties like impairing the
dirvers
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driver
 license for a lifetime if claims someone's life and others like
this
. A
retesing
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retesting
 system must established for
drivers
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rule
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. In conclusion, annual driving tests hold some promise for improving highway safety. Regularly assessing
driver
 competency could identify those needing skill refreshers or who might be unfit to drive.
However
, concerns about cost, stress on older
drivers
, and the limited scope of tests suggest a more nuanced approach. Implementing targeted re-testing based on maturity, accident history, or license renewal intervals could be a more effective compromise.
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task response
While you address the prompt and present both merits and drawbacks, a more structured approach will enhance clarity. Break down points into clear paragraphs for better readability.
coherence cohesion
Focus on maintaining consistent tone and avoiding spelling and grammatical errors. This improves readability and the overall impression on the reader.
task response
The essay recognizes a variety of factors impacting driving safety, not just the annual test proposal. This is good for a critical analysis.
coherence cohesion
The piece balances consideration of different age groups, discussing implications for both older and younger drivers.

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