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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of globetrotters, who visited
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three destinations,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships,
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 and the total number of
visitors
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 in millions.
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, the total
numbers
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 of tourists increased every year and the majority of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships increased.
Visitors
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 staying on islands showed less interest as compared to
visitors
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 who stayed on islands. It is conspicuous that the total number of tourists, who visited
were
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 1
million
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 in 2010 and rose significantly every year till 2016
recahed
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reached
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2.7
million
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 after that
tourist
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tourists
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 skyrocketed
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reached
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3.5
million
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 in 2017.
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships increased marginally from 0.25
million
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 in 2010 to 0.5
million
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 in 2011 and it can be seen
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declined
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 slowly and touched nearly 0.25
million
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 in 2011,
further
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 it experienced expanded slowly and touched
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2
million
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 in 2017. Probing ahead,
visitors
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 who stayed on
island
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 were constant from 2010 to 2011 about 0.25
million
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, with
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further
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 fluctuations and reached
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1.5
million
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 in
2013after
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2013
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it
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plateau
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 from 2013 to 2015 at 1.5
million
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,
in addition
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 it can be seen some downturned and upward trends
peak
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peaking
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 at 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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