The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the labour force employment in 5 different industries in the USA, starting from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, the majority of employment witnessed an increase over the period of time, except for farming, fishing and foresting.
Additionally
, the figure for farming, fishing and foresting
maintained
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highest until 1990. Industrial, Sales and office, Technical and Sales and office shared the similar starting at very low, around 0 to 10 each. After 80 years,
industrial
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the industrial
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and technical labour force experienced the most significant increase to nearly 40 and 35, respectively, in 2010.
Whereas
, around 10 units is witnessed to went up for other services employment, at a slower rate compared to
aforementioned
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industry.
On the other hand
, farming, fishing and foresting depicted an adverse trend with a dramatic fall from around 80 in 1930, to the point, which was lower than 10 in 2010. An approximate
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5 units increase showed in other services in 1940, before it started to remain a constant trend to the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • service sector
  • figures
  • percentages
  • trends
  • decreasing trend
  • increasing trend
  • significant growth
  • considerable decline
  • expansion
  • analyze
  • observations
  • key periods
  • transitions
  • conclusion
  • economy
  • shifted focus
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