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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
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The given figure illustrates the number of householders in three years 2011, 2007 and 2015 in the US by their annual incomes in millions. It is evidence fact that in 2007, 25 householders profited one hundred
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thousand
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thousand
 dollars but
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 number of people had more in 2011 and 2015.
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, the 25,000 dollar
income
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 was the most in 2011 and after that in 2015 and 2007.
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,the most
income
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 between these years is in 2015 with 100,000 dollars or more rather than others.
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, the lowest
income
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 was between 75,000 and 99,999 each year with approximately 15 householders.
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, 20 housekeepers had equal
income
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 in three years with 50,000 and 74,999 dollars annually.
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, the most
income
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 was in 2015 with 100,000 or more which was rented by more than 30 housekeepers.
On the other hand
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, the lowest
income
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 was in 2011 for 75,000 and 99,999 with less than 15 housekeepers.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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