The table below shows the results of a survey asking US consumers about shopping at K-Mart. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows the outcomes of a survey done in the United States about the frequency of shopping in a certain store
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And its relation to being in a mall or not.
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Overall
, Stores located in a shopping mall had more vists
than any other location. Correct your spelling
visits
Additionally
, individuals who never shop do not have a nearby store located in a mall.
Furthermore
, the first category (often buyers) where the majority of surveyed people totalling 80 out of 195. But over 75% of them visited the shops located in shopping centres.
moreover
, More than half (35 out of 60) of the Second category (occasional shoppers) liked stores that are separate. Lastly
, the majority for
the third classification do not have any nearby shops located in Malls.
All and all, stores pinpointed in Centers had the most amount of visitors totalling 140 individuals, even though the number of Mall-located shops is the least.Change preposition
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