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The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart demonstrates the results of a survey about people's
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities,
It is clear that
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 Melbourne has the highest percentage of going to a cafe
for purchasing
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to purchase
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coffee
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 or tea at an approximate rate of 61%. First of all, Sydney is significantly the highest city in Australia that bought fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks with a rate of about 44%,
Whereas
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 Brisbane is the lowest area that purchased fresh
coffee
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 in Australia with a percentage of approximately 34%.
Furthermore
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, instant
coffe
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coffee
 is
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in
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most
demanded
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demand
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 in Adelaide, 50% of Adelaide residents bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, having a
coffee
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 or tea at a cafe is mostly preferred in all cities except Adelaide
which
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where
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 buying instant
coffee
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 is more common.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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