The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the number of adults participating in different major
sports
in one area, in 1997 and 2017 , it shows the difference between the
years
and the number of people
interstates
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and it is divided into 7
sports
.
Overall
as it has shown the biggest percentage is in Tennis in 1997 its 50 adults and in the year 2017 it's about 55 it is not a big difference between the
years
because the
sports
is
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not boring , for basketball the percentage was less it means basketball is not a common
sport
in 1997 but in 2017 it has a big great turnout , cricket in 1997 was famous and a lot of people wants to participate but in 2017 everything changed , in the Golf there is no a big change between the
years
it is a classic
sport
, Swimming is an interesting
sport
and many people love it so there is not a changed ,Football has more popularity in 2017
also
Rugby in
sum
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I could say the biggest percentage in all
sports
is Tennis because Tennis is a classic
sport
, easy and funny
however
in
golf
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golf,
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there is not a big difference between the two
years
the reason back for the
sport
is so fun .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, years, sport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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