In many countries, truancy* is a serious problem for both parents and educators. •What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community?

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In multiple nations mothers , fathers and pedagogues issue is that kids pretend to go to
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but in
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go somewhere else. The main problem
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cause is
child
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children
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not interested in
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, what’s more is that several negative effects can take place. The principal problem could be that our system of study and teaching
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boring, formal and narrow. In
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numerous
countries educating children
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place in the same classroom ,
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subjects are only in theories and in a typical format. What’s more, bullying
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can be the reason why a pupil doesn’t want to go to
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.
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, a recent government survey found that 85
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of students run away from
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, owing to it
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boring and they do not interested in
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type
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of
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. To tackle that problem the government should divide
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lessons
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into several types ,
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children’s
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. Many individuals want to learn things which they will need in the future,
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to learn things that they have
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an interest
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can
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open from
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a desire
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to come to class.
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, in Europe
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similar
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such
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as chemistry and biology have been regrouped into one common, which
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them
more easy
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to get.
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, truants often run away from
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because of indifference studies. Afterwards , it leads to bad consequences for children and for society too. A child can
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get into a bad society or get carried away by forbidden substances. I believe that
school
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lessons
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will be changed for children and their interest
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lessons
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will rise.
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There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrases throughout the essay. Paying attention to sentence structure and verb agreement could greatly improve clarity. Also, avoid overly informal expressions like 'mom and dad' in formal writing.
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The essay would benefit from a clearer structure, with more defined paragraphs and a more logical progression of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that there are smooth transitions between paragraphs.
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Your introduction sets up the topic well and provides a clear indication of what to expect in the essay. You also address both the causes and the consequences of truancy, which shows a complete understanding of the task.
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You have made a commendable effort to provide examples to support your points, which helps to illustrate your arguments more clearly. For example, the government survey statistic adds credibility to your argument about the boredom students feel.

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