In many countries, truancy* is a serious problem for both parents and educators. •What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community?
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school
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children
school
, what’s more is that several negative effects can take place.
The principal problem could be that our system of study and teaching too
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subjects are only in theories and in a typical format. What’s more, bullying also
can be the reason why a pupil doesn’t want to go to school
. For example
, a recent government survey found that 85 percent
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To tackle that problem the government should divide Fix the agreement mistake
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To conclude
, truants often run away from lessons
because of indifference studies. Afterwards , it leads to bad consequences for children and for society too. A child can also
get into a bad society or get carried away by forbidden substances. I believe that school
lessons
will be changed for children and their interest for
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will rise.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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task achievement
There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrases throughout the essay. Paying attention to sentence structure and verb agreement could greatly improve clarity. Also, avoid overly informal expressions like 'mom and dad' in formal writing.
coherence cohesion
The essay would benefit from a clearer structure, with more defined paragraphs and a more logical progression of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that there are smooth transitions between paragraphs.
task achievement
Your introduction sets up the topic well and provides a clear indication of what to expect in the essay. You also address both the causes and the consequences of truancy, which shows a complete understanding of the task.
task achievement
You have made a commendable effort to provide examples to support your points, which helps to illustrate your arguments more clearly. For example, the government survey statistic adds credibility to your argument about the boredom students feel.
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