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the map bellow show changes which took place in liverton city from 1980 to currentdays. Summarize the data

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The maps illustrate the development which took place in Liverton city between 1980 and the present day.
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from an industrial area to a mainly urban area. In the 1980s year most part of the land used to belong to Crane, but during the next year the town saw a number of significant changes. In 1980 the warehouse located in the northwest was demolished to make way for an education centre. Another crane and warehouse located in the north were knocked down into a sailing club and playground for kids.
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, the ships which were on the
river
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 were turned into ships’ museums.
Moreover
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, on the northeast side, there was established a flood barrier.
On
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 the south, It was constructed
river
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 walk along the
river
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 construction was on the south side of the city. There on the southwest used to be a crane which rebuilt into a hotel. Next to it on the left warehouse changed into accommodation. There was installed a new car park on the southeast side of the monopoly right along the
river
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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