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The two maps below show a small local museum in the year 1957 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show a small local museum in the year 1957 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps highlight the main developments that have changed in the Local
Museum
 at the
north-east
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northeast
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 corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Streat in 1957 and 2007.
Overall
, what stands out from both maps is that the building has become much larger,
while
 the number of trees has been significantly reduced. In detail, the
museum
 had three parts in 1957, was extended nearly twofold and had six parts
such
 as
cafe
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a cafe
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, reception and education
center
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centre
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, over a period of 50 years. A
further
 important change is the path to the entrance hall of
museum
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the museum
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 has been removed and a car park has been built
instead
. All of
trees
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the trees
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 in the roadside have been removed and just a few of
trees
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the trees
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 in the
north-west
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northwest
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was
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were
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remind
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removed
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.
In addition
, the entrance has been moved from the middle of the building to the
south-west
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southwest
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 of the
museum
, where
was
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there is
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museum
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a museum
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 shop. The local history room has replaced the national history exhibition.
Also
, the local history room and
museum
-store room in 1957 have
beed
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been
 turned into
museum
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a museum
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 shop and cafe
recpectively
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respectively
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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