You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madame: I hope
this
email finds you well. I am writing
you
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because I am interested in participating in your
seminar
of
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on
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"working as a freelance interior designer ".
Along
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Throughout
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my career as
a
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Interior designer and Architect, I have had
experience
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the experience
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to work
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for
a different companies
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different companies
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. And now, I feel it is the moment to change and continue my professional career
like
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a freelance professional.
However
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this
is a new step for me.
Moreover
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I have many questions,
doubts
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and doubts
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, and I realized that I have a lack of knowledge that I would like to improve. Surely, I can learn in your
seminar
and I am looking forward to
start
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it.
Firstly
, I would like to know more details, because I did not
enough
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have enough
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information on your website.
Actually
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Actually,
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I am living in Spain, and I would need to know what day the
seminar
is going to start and
during
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apply
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how much time it will be,
due to
I have to buy the tickets and I need to do it in advance. To be sure about my decision, could bring me more information about the program and
above all
the cost?
In addition
, I would be grateful if you recommend me some cheap places for my accommodation near the place where the
seminar
is going to take. I will
wait
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your answer with all details. Thank you in advance. Sincerely, Lydia Garcia.
Submitted by lydiagarcia.gr on

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task achievement
Include all necessary details to provide a full response. The letter adequately addresses the seminar's program, dates, accommodation, and cost, but requesting information about the schedule, main topics covered, and any special preparations might make the request more complete.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by ensuring each sentence transitions smoothly to the next. For example, clarify the connection between wanting to sign up for the seminar and needing specific information. Avoid fragmented sentences and try to link ideas logically.
coherence cohesion
Revise some grammar points, such as using 'Moreover' and 'Firstly' correctly, and replace phrases like 'due to I have to buy the tickets' with smoother alternatives like 'as I need to buy the tickets in advance.'
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for the context.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, giving the letter a professional feel.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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