You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madame: I hope

this

email finds you well. I am writing

you

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to you

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because I am interested in participating in your

seminar

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"working as a freelance interior designer ".

Along

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Throughout

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my career as

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Interior designer and Architect, I have had

experience

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the experience

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to work

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working

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for

a different companies

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different companies

a different company

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. And now, I feel it is the moment to change and continue my professional career

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a freelance professional.

However

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this

is a new step for me.

Moreover

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I have many questions,

doubts

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and doubts

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, and I realized that I have a lack of knowledge that I would like to improve. Surely, I can learn in your

seminar

and I am looking forward to

start

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it.

Firstly

, I would like to know more details, because I did not

enough

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information on your website.

Actually

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I am living in Spain, and I would need to know what day the

seminar

is going to start and

during

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apply

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how much time it will be,

due to

I have to buy the tickets and I need to do it in advance. To be sure about my decision, could bring me more information about the program and

above all

the cost?

In addition

, I would be grateful if you recommend me some cheap places for my accommodation near the place where the

seminar

is going to take. I will

wait

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your answer with all details. Thank you in advance. Sincerely, Lydia Garcia.

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task achievement

Include all necessary details to provide a full response. The letter adequately addresses the seminar's program, dates, accommodation, and cost, but requesting information about the schedule, main topics covered, and any special preparations might make the request more complete.

coherence cohesion

Improve logical flow by ensuring each sentence transitions smoothly to the next. For example, clarify the connection between wanting to sign up for the seminar and needing specific information. Avoid fragmented sentences and try to link ideas logically.

coherence cohesion

Revise some grammar points, such as using 'Moreover' and 'Firstly' correctly, and replace phrases like 'due to I have to buy the tickets' with smoother alternatives like 'as I need to buy the tickets in advance.'

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for the context.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are appropriately used, giving the letter a professional feel.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

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All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

10 paragraphs

236 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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