The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The diagram illustrates the way in which instant noodles are produced.
Overall
, the process consists of 8 stages, beginning with mixing the oil and water with Linking Words
flour
and ending with labelling and sealing.
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Initially
, a truck is loaded with Linking Words
flour
in the storage silos, Use synonyms
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, it brings the Linking Words
flour
to the factory where the Use synonyms
flour
is added to water and oil and undergoes a mixing stage. Use synonyms
Next,
dough sheets which are prepared by rollers, pass a machine and convert to dough strips. In the next stage, after shaping noodles like discs, they are cooked with oil and after being dried by passing a heating surface, they are ready for the next stage.
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Subsequently
, prepared noodle discs are placed into cups where vegetables and spices are added to them. Linking Words
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, after being flavoured, they are labelled and sealed automatically by a machine. Linking Words
Finally
, they are ready to be sent to markets and purchased by peopleLinking Words
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