Many people go to university for acadamic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualifed workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Vocational
train ing
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training

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after academic study is an important issue that appear in the labour market recently.I
am strongly agree
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strongly agree

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with having
traning
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training

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after academic study
especially
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, especially

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in some fields
such
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as
,
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apply

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technical science. To have an
acadimic
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academic

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study is something
an
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important.but
trining
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training

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is necessary for carers and jobs.
most
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Most

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of the
secess
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service

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projects around the world
passed
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are passed

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bue to the
stafs
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staffs
staff

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Which
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Who

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have
good
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a good

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experience.

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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to provide a clear introduction that sets the context and states your position clearly.
supported main points
Develop your main points more fully by providing relevant and specific examples to support your arguments.
complete response
Ensure that you cover all aspects of the task prompt comprehensively.
logical structure
Organize your essay with a logical structure, including clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
clear comprehensive ideas
Enhance the clarity of your ideas by elaborating on how vocational training complements academic study in various scenarios.
task achievement
The essay acknowledges the importance of both academic study and vocational training.
clear comprehensive ideas
The writer shows an understanding of the need for practical skills in the job market.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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