The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.
The chart illustrates the average Japanese
monthy
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monthly
income (Yen) from 1953 to 1983,and the cost of the two types of television during the same year.
Overall
,it can be seen from the graph that, there was a significant drop in local TV prices in both categories,
while
the salaries still show an upward trend.
In addition
,
coloured
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television system was only introduced in the 1960s and already had the highest position among others. Looking at the details ,we can figure out that, the least quantity of money that has each citizen was in 1953 with 20 yen per month. So, many locals couldn't afford
themself
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even black and white TV which at that time cost 100.
Subsequently
, over time many things have changed and in 1963 the amount earned and expense of
uncolored
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TVs were equal.
Apart from
this
, in 1968 the wage increased to 100
as well as
charge
of
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the
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coloured television
that
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considerably decreased in that period. Eventually, in 1973 the average income of almost 180 yen took the leading tendency.
Whereas
, watching TV became an unpopular activity among the Japanese population.
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