The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in autumn and spring. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in autumn and spring. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The bar chart compares the expected daily
electricity
demand in England during autumn and spring. Meanwhile, the pie chart illustrates the use of
electricity
in an average English home.
Overall
,
electricity
usage
peaked during the 21st
hour
in autumn whilst in spring,
electricity
usage
spiked in the 13th and 22nd
hour
.
Additionally
, the majority of
electricity
is used for heating rooms and heating water. In autumn,
electricity
usage
rose from nearly 35000
units
to just under 40000
units
after three hours before dropping down to 30000 after a period of seven hours. After the 9th
hour
,
electricity
usage
begins to take momentum, increasing to 40000
units
by the 13th
hour
before plateauing until there is a sharp rise in the next
hour
, reaching its peak. By the 24th
hour
,
electricity
usage
decreased significantly to about 35000
units
In spring, during the first nine hours,
electricity
usage
decreased gradually from just under 20000
units
to nearly 12000
units
before it rose and reached its first peak at 20000
units
. After the 15th
hour
,
electricity
usage
lowered and remained
to
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the 21st
hour
when it rose again and peaked for a second time at 20000
units
before decreasing again. With regards to the pie chart, over half of
electricity
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supplied to the average English house was used for heating of rooms and water. 17.5% of the
electricity
is used to power ovens,
kettle
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kettles
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and washing
machine
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whilst 16% powers lighting, TV and radio. The remaining 15% is used to power vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools.
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