Some people believe that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people argue that bicycles are a better way of travelling in a city.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals consider motor vehicles more convenient to go around in a city,
however
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others trust
on
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bicycles to make it more suitable to travel in a place
surroundings
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their residents. My concerns on
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simple
that
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I believe both ways have their own benefits
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i
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am going to explain in upcoming paragraphs. Travelling by
cars
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makes it easy for mankind to save
their
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time and energy.
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consumes less time and power to go anywhere in their hometown because it
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thousands of miles within an hour or less than that which
assist
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a person
to finish
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their tasks
during
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few
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hours.
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, it provides humans ample
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security and privacy which leads to an enjoyable moment
while
they are on
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a trip
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with their loved ones.
For instance
,cars are kind of personal vehicles that have
roof
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a roof
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on
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them
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it
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which
makes
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them unworried about the bad weather and they can spend precious time with their families without any hesitations.
While in
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case
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the case
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of
phsical
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physical
rides like
bicycles
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bicycles,
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it has its own positive effects
in
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the lives of human beings.The main advantage is it helps them to maintain their fitness balance. As an example, people
travels
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who travels
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on bicycles spend more of their body energy on it to make it run
that
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pretend
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them more sweating
while
they are on these rides which leads to a healthy
lifestyles
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.
Additionally
, it offers them a chance to save their money in both ways like they have been staying healthy
do
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not need to go
for
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doctor
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or they could save their
fuels
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consumption that
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compulary
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compulsory
for motor vehicles. In conclusion , I would like to say both ideas are beneficial for people to travel around their areas but
it
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their
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is a proper
balanced
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balance
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between
two
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the two
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trends because they should consider or choose
accord
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to
its
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their
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needs
while
in bad weather they should use cars
otherwise
motorcycles are the best
options
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.
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grammar
Try to avoid small grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreements and verb tense consistency. For example, 'Travelling by cars makes it easy...' should be 'Traveling by cars makes it easier...'
structure
Make sure to use paragraphs effectively. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea that relates back to your thesis. For instance, you can emphasize the discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of both means of transport in separate paragraphs.
content
You provide clear and understandable points for both sides of the argument regarding cars and bicycles.
structure
Your essay includes a logical introduction and conclusion, indicating well-structured thought.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • maintenance
  • eco-friendly
  • infrastructure
  • physical health
  • suitable
  • weather conditions
  • traffic
  • repair costs
  • cycling infrastructure
  • fuel costs
  • carrying heavy loads
  • physical limitations
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