you are soon going to spend three months doing work exprience in an organisation. write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work exprience. in your letter thank the manager for the opportunity to do work exprience explain what you hope to learn from the work exprience ask some questions about the work exprience you are going to do
Dear Mr Kave,
I am writing in connection with spending 3 months work experience in the White Organisation. I am Mahshid Kargar I am a pharmacy student. First of all, I would thank you for
this
great opportunity that provided for me. I believe this
experience can be a stepping stone in my life due to
being compatible with my studies and research.
To explain more, It would be a worthwhile experience as well as
it helps me to broaden my horizons. Due to
its unique tutors and syllabuses, I wish I learned more about treatments of elderly people and their limitations.
Last
but not least, I wish to know whether this
organisation provides me with accommodation or not. Because I am not living in Tehran so
suitable accommodation is a critical factor for me. Correct word choice
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In addition
, I want to know if there are some ways in order to connect and find tutors or not.
I am looking forward to receiving a message from you.
Yours sincerely,
Mahshid KargarSubmitted by kargar.mh1992 on
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task achievement
Pay attention to sentence variety and ensure all sentences are complete and clear. For instance, 'To explain more, It would be a worthwhile experience' could be improved to 'I believe it would be a worthwhile experience.'
coherence
Consider using more formal transitions between paragraphs to improve coherence. For example, instead of 'Last but not least,' you might use 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,'.
task achievement
You addressed all parts of the task, including thanking the manager, explaining what you hope to learn, and asking relevant questions.
task achievement
The letter maintains a formal and polite tone, appropriate for professional communication.
coherence
Your paragraphs each address a single main idea, helping to keep your points clear and organized.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite