A friend of yours is thinking of going camping this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter; 1.Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday 2.Describe some possible disadvantages 3.Say whether youd like to go camping with your friend this summer.

Dear Prabh, I hope you are doing well! I received your letter where you need some recommendations regarding the location for camping for
summer
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the summer
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holidays. I wanted to suggest
you
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to you
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one of the best
location
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locations
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is Banff in
Calagary
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Calgary
, Canada.
This
site is surrounded
with
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by
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mountains and a beautiful lake passing by, which makes
this
place a heaven.
Such
place
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a place
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is a perfect way to enjoy
summers
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summer
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. But, it
involve
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involves
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some
downside
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downsides
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as the place is enriched with nature. It does not have
development
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a development
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for basic human survival in that particular area, which means if you plan to spend
few
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a few
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days there, you need to prepare yourself with every
neccessary
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necessary
amenities
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amenity
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like food shelter water. I really
wants
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want
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to join you
this
time. I took
few
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a few
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days off just to spend time together camping in nature with
such
a nice.
View points
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. We will start preparing for
this
awesome trip in
some
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a few
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days. Yours Lovingly Harshit
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure a logical structure by clearly separating the introduction, body, and conclusion. For example, you could start with a brief introduction, then provide a paragraph each for the advantages, disadvantages, and concluding remarks.
style and accuracy
Pay attention to minor grammatical and spelling errors such as 'Calagary' (should be 'Calgary'), 'neccessary' (should be 'necessary'), and 'I really wants' (should be 'I really want'). These small inaccuracies can be distracting.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
complete response
The letter addresses all parts of the task, offering reasons for enjoying camping, possible disadvantages, and a personal decision regarding joining the trip.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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